tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5409519305033642895.post3577560734866608581..comments2023-06-24T14:21:13.094+02:00Comments on AppleHouse Poetry Workshop: NewsLynne Reeshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11852192697142140025noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5409519305033642895.post-81497114484995735372010-02-10T19:53:23.297+01:002010-02-10T19:53:23.297+01:00'...where the gladness felt, just can't he...'...where the gladness felt, just can't help but burst out all around, like blossoms in a good year...'<br /><br />That's lovely, Ramon. Thank you again for your feedback.Lynne Reeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11852192697142140025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5409519305033642895.post-86933248644287134612010-02-08T22:09:34.299+01:002010-02-08T22:09:34.299+01:00Many thanks for explaining Lynne. Truth is, the he...Many thanks for explaining Lynne. Truth is, the heart I had in mind was yours, where in the middle line, I sought a link to the 'free' aspect of the stone. A sense (as can happen, sometimes inexplicably), where the gladness felt, just can't help but burst out all around, like blossoms in a good year, and so sweet.<br /><br />Too much, perhaps as you say.<br />Hope you find the fitting phrase.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11446462544122380144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5409519305033642895.post-12502440374864371842010-01-31T19:41:55.814+01:002010-01-31T19:41:55.814+01:00Thank you, Ramon. I still haven't resolved thi...Thank you, Ramon. I still haven't resolved this haiku so I'm open for suggestions.<br /><br />No need to peek through your fingers... : )<br /><br />I like the connection between 'early' and 'fresh' and in a longer poem I think I'd be happy with the image of 'fresh heart'. The problem that I find with writing haiku is that because they're so small, and need to be so 'light', it's easy to over-do the imagery, try and make it work too hard, suggest too much. And, for me, 'fresh heart' might be doing that... The heart of the peach is its stone... and I already have that in the haiku. But I'll think on this some more too. Your comments have freshened my ideas towards the haiku. Thanks again.Lynne Reeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11852192697142140025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5409519305033642895.post-63897499337167386992010-01-31T17:20:47.412+01:002010-01-31T17:20:47.412+01:00Lynne;
you invited ideas for your 'early break...Lynne;<br />you invited ideas for your 'early breakfast' ku. I have been playing around with this form a little of late, and liking it. As always, much to learn. Getting behind your own ideas of 'free and early' as well as the tightness desired, exercised me for sure. But I feel will come to an end with your comment on what I've done to date.<br /><br />Ready?<br /><br />early breakfast<br />fresh heart<br />of a freestone peach<br /><br />Maybe I am completely off beam. When I return to read your reply, I'll probably do so looking through small gaps between my fingers.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11446462544122380144noreply@blogger.com